Wednesday, September 7, 2016

Favorite Passage

I hadn't done this lately. In my WIP:

“I feel bad for ruining his life,” Norm said.
I started hyperventilating.
“What?” Roger shrieked. “He had a hit out on all of us.”
“Just self-preservation,” Norm mumbled.
“I’ll preserve his—” and Roger used his Marine-vocabulary for a good fifty syllables.
“Are you through?” I asked.
Roger ratcheted his head to the left. I think his neck popped five times. “Meh.”



5 comments:

  1. In your books you swear. Does swearing make the book be a best sale?

    I cannot understand that. Years ago authors never swore. And the books sold. Can you give me your reason why you want to swear? Rather then not?

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  2. You are a writing machine. I hope that Mar is nudging you for the next.

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  3. Who is doing the hyperventilating? Norm feels bad and Roger is shrieking; is there a third person present?

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  4. Thanks for sharing your WIP!

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  5. Seeing Mac wanted to put this on his comment page.
    I am sure others would like how he explained his question back to me.

    I wrote an Author but he also coments my page. He writes harsh books. S o I asked him.
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    Carol Henstra






    I cannot understand that. Years ago authors never swore. And the books sold. Can you give me your reason why you want to swear? Rather then not?

    His Answer below.
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    He felt he gave me a reply back on my question. I did leave out some personal name not to mention. So I will share. Seeing he put my email up on his blog. Why not I. let him speak what he wrote to me. I am sure it becomes a conversation piece. Or do they say. Coffee conversation or tea time.

    Hi Carolann

    I don’t think ‘Roger used his Marine vocabulary’ counts for using adult language.

    My wife has never liked my books with colorful metaphors. I was raised a redneck, around cowboys, roughnecks, and pipeline workers, so I was quite the effort on her part. Four-letter words were part of me, and as normal as please and thank you to others. which I can’t say one way or another whether that has helped or weakened my stories.

    There are some genres and personalities that presenting them with Sunday-best vocabulary would be simply so out of place it would distance some readers. You can’t have a space captain saying please in the middle of a horrific battle, or a bounty hunter chasing down a low-life miscreant in 100-degree heat.

    Just as the writer has to give thought to the physical setting of every scene, to fit the story, so must he/she design a personality/speech that fits. No writer would use the F-bomb in a middle-grade story. But most readers would accept a really ticked off Marine dropping a few choice, adult words.

    I don’t write Christian literature. I think readers who dislike adult language probably keep that as their preferred reading. I write about real people. In my world, real people drop an occasional F-bomb and exclaim their disapproval with other four-letter words.

    A last thought. A lot has changed in literature as has our society. Little highly stylistic prose gets published today. Today’s reader has a shorter attention span and gets bored with a book with too much description. We are used to action and more action. Reality, and a little more reality. Hemingway nor Fitzgerald could get a manuscript picked up today as an aspiring author. Turn on prime time TV today and you’ll see brisker, coarser language than you could ever expect just ten years ago.

    I think there is room across the style spectrum. No two people’s taste is identical.

    I appreciate your note. (I may keep this for a blog post one day :)

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