Tuesday, August 24, 2010

Unnecessary Words

The dragonets' eyes whirled, and her head swayed back and forth.
The dragonets' eyes whirled, and her head swayed.

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Mac
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1 comment:

  1. What a succinct post! I see stuff like this ALL the time in my rough drafts.

    Here is another:
    She nodded her head (what else do you nod?)

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