Friday, August 27, 2010

Simple Past

Jear growled, baring his yellow-gray teeth, gripping his staff firmly, and turning toward the troll in challenge.

Jear growled, bared his yellow-gray teeth, gripped his staff firmly, and whipped toward the troll in challenge.

A little show-don't-tell, toss-out-the-ADVs thrown in.
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Regards,
Mac
http://home.roadrunner.com/~macwheeler/

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