Tuesday, August 17, 2010

Get Rid of Passive

Easier to do than you think.

Youthful gnomes, majies, perhaps twenty of them, had Torc and Asr surrounded, and were pelting them with pebbles from the dry creek.

Youthful gnomes, majies, perhaps twenty of them, surrounded Torc and Asr and pelted them with pebbles from the dry creek.


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Regards, Mac
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2 comments:

  1. Yes, it is an easy fix! I'm surprised at some of the passive voice that's allowed to slip through edits in published books. Granted, we need some passive voice in our work for distancing, but too much weakens the writing. I'm not a big fan of passive voice.s

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